10 pages.

60 minutes.

A clear diagnosis + a rewrite plan.

If your opening isn’t working, the rest of the script can’t outrun it. This session shows you what’s actually wrong and what to fix first, so your next draft finally changes the read.

What This Is                         .

A focused diagnostic on your opening pages, delivered with clear priorities and specific page moves. This isn't a full-script deep dive and it isn't a pep talk. You'll get a professional read on the pages that decide whether anyone keeps reading.

Notes from a working TV writer with decades in the room, on set, and in pitch meetings.

You’ll Leave With                 .

• The core issue holding the opening back

• Your top 3 fixes, prioritized

• A clear rewrite order: what to change first, second, third

• Next-step guidance: structure, character, clarity, stakes, or momentum (whichever is actually driving the problem)

Translation: you’ll know what draft to write next.

What To Submit                   .

After purchase, you’ll receive a link with simple submission steps.

• First 10 pages (PDF)

• Logline (optional, but helpful)

• 1-paragraph synopsis (optional, if you have it)

What We Cover                    .

• Hook, clarity, and momentum

• Protagonist intention + stakes

• Scene purpose and progression

• Tone and story engine

We’re not going for perfect. We’re going for progress.

What This Isn’t                     .

• Not full script coverage

• Not line-by-line editing of every sentence

• Not a guarantee of industry outcomes

It is a fast, professional way to stop rewriting in circles and start rewriting with purpose.

We'll meet for 60 minutes in a Zoom session. You'll receive submission steps and the meeting link after your purchase.